I really enjoyed all the different ideas Neil's story laid out. A line that particularly stood out to me was "Parked in the shadows, my fingernail scraping dried coffee off the edge of the driver’s side door night after night, I watched." This specific detail about the coffee anchored me right in the setting. Those are the kinds of lines…
I really enjoyed all the different ideas Neil's story laid out. A line that particularly stood out to me was "Parked in the shadows, my fingernail scraping dried coffee off the edge of the driver’s side door night after night, I watched." This specific detail about the coffee anchored me right in the setting. Those are the kinds of lines I love to create while writing.
The story as a whole was like a mass of stars. I think each part of the piece stood out in their own right, but I had a difficult time seeing the entire constellation. Perhaps, there were some details I overlooked while reading, but it may help (at least me) if the reader had a clearer idea of where they were and what was going on at the outset.
I really enjoyed all the different ideas Neil's story laid out. A line that particularly stood out to me was "Parked in the shadows, my fingernail scraping dried coffee off the edge of the driver’s side door night after night, I watched." This specific detail about the coffee anchored me right in the setting. Those are the kinds of lines I love to create while writing.
The story as a whole was like a mass of stars. I think each part of the piece stood out in their own right, but I had a difficult time seeing the entire constellation. Perhaps, there were some details I overlooked while reading, but it may help (at least me) if the reader had a clearer idea of where they were and what was going on at the outset.