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M. E. Prince's avatar

Thank you so much! I'd been over this scene so many times that I'd gotten blind to it. And then I realized I used the wrong title. It should have been "Mirror Springs". Sorry about that.

For most of the book, Cecily is a college freshman, still pursued by the alligator man. He's become a splicing of her little kid memory of the corpse with some of the features and movements of an alligator.

Thanks again. I'm working on polishing the whole ms now and can definitely see how to apply these lessons to the whole.

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Matt Andersen's avatar

Seeing the different techniques of how to strip back the dialog while retaining the necessary information and increasing tension is profoundly help. Thanks!

Love this chapter, Maria. Once we get to the body I’m hooked in and want to keep reading! I wonder if you could allude to that a little bit deeper at the beginning, dig a little more in to the “alligator man” before switching to the funeral.

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