Save the Date
A week until our first bar event
May 23rd at the Hindsight Taproom…
Next Monday will be your first chance to road test work in front of a live audience. The place holds a maximum of forty people so get your hat in the ring now. Bring work, and we’ll draw names from a hat to determine who gets to present this go-round. The address is 5829 SE Powell Blvd, Portland 97206.
Hours run from seven until approx. ten Monday night.
Can someone who is going to be there in person please, please, pleeeeease do an Instagram live or something?
*apologies to Chuck for using a set of three “please”s*
Chuck -- I have a dialogue question. It seems like I’ve gotten fairly good at having dialogue between two characters who know each other well. I’m able to avoid ping pong conversation and give attribution to actions. But right now I’m writing a scene with two characters who have just met each other and I’m trying to figure out how to make it less bland and boring.
The scene is fine as it moves on past the introductions. It’s just that the first part of when two people meet is hard to give substance to. The main character is helping a woman change a tire in a bad part of town. She eats fast food on the roof of her car as he changes the tire out and things pick up well from there as they warm up to each other.
But the first part where he’s saying he’s happy to help her, his name, reassuring her that he’s not a threat (which he isn’t), etc. It just seems so... generic and predictable. Any ideas to consider? Maybe have him hand her his wallet or something? Would that be a strong physical gesture I could use that isn’t so boring?? As opposed to “Hi my name is blah blah blah...” ... “What’s your name?” -- heh ok it isn’t *that* bad but I’m simplifying to demonstrate.