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Wonderful story! I detest 2nd person normally but this changed everything I thought I knew about writing it. We’ll done Tony!!

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Sometimes you read a story and by the end you’re furious. Furious because you love it so much you wish you had written it. Tony, so you know, I’m fuming now.

I haven’t read anything this glorious in a while. Brilliant story, fantastic writing and voice. Very, very, very well done, man. You’ve got a new fan.

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Thanks for sharing Tony, loved reading it, and Chuck’s expert commentary identified some things I’m sure I would have missed.

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Hi Tony! Nice work, thanks for sharing.

My favorite image/line is this: "all bouncers bald with goatees per stipulation of the bouncers union." Really cracked me up. :)

I also liked how the narrator goes through this wondering of what the girls are whispering in guys' ears but never ends up finding out for himself.

I like getting dragged around following Dan. The code language. The constant movement. The nicknames for different body shapes. The Mom.

Great work, keep it up!

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Tony, the voice in your story is just so well constructed. Loved it. Can't wait to read more.

I got a chuckle out of "and you’re a bit jealous because that’s method gaming you never thought to try."

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Shout out to all the mom strippers out there. Word up!

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No one says "Hey Honey! I'm going to the strip club for a bit, see you later!" And every scream or cry is precisely muffled. And when you touch on the fact that you see an old acquaintance from a gaming group and try desperately not to notice each other. No one is going to look for you at the strip club. Perfect.

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