Sometimes you read a story and by the end you’re furious. Furious because you love it so much you wish you had written it. Tony, so you know, I’m fuming now.
I haven’t read anything this glorious in a while. Brilliant story, fantastic writing and voice. Very, very, very well done, man. You’ve got a new fan.
No one says "Hey Honey! I'm going to the strip club for a bit, see you later!" And every scream or cry is precisely muffled. And when you touch on the fact that you see an old acquaintance from a gaming group and try desperately not to notice each other. No one is going to look for you at the strip club. Perfect.
Bravo, dude.
Wonderful story! I detest 2nd person normally but this changed everything I thought I knew about writing it. We’ll done Tony!!
Love this.
Sometimes you read a story and by the end you’re furious. Furious because you love it so much you wish you had written it. Tony, so you know, I’m fuming now.
I haven’t read anything this glorious in a while. Brilliant story, fantastic writing and voice. Very, very, very well done, man. You’ve got a new fan.
Thanks for sharing Tony, loved reading it, and Chuck’s expert commentary identified some things I’m sure I would have missed.
Hi Tony! Nice work, thanks for sharing.
My favorite image/line is this: "all bouncers bald with goatees per stipulation of the bouncers union." Really cracked me up. :)
I also liked how the narrator goes through this wondering of what the girls are whispering in guys' ears but never ends up finding out for himself.
I like getting dragged around following Dan. The code language. The constant movement. The nicknames for different body shapes. The Mom.
Great work, keep it up!
Tony, the voice in your story is just so well constructed. Loved it. Can't wait to read more.
I got a chuckle out of "and you’re a bit jealous because that’s method gaming you never thought to try."
Shout out to all the mom strippers out there. Word up!
No one says "Hey Honey! I'm going to the strip club for a bit, see you later!" And every scream or cry is precisely muffled. And when you touch on the fact that you see an old acquaintance from a gaming group and try desperately not to notice each other. No one is going to look for you at the strip club. Perfect.